Rip it Apart!
This blog focuses on making my post available for everyone to see and critique. Tell me what you think!
The Podcast Itself
Things I want the Audience to Know
1. What to know about my project?
My project is very dicey, it transitions kind of weirdly. I'm currently working on fixing this, but give me any ideas on how to make these transitions better!
Another thing I want you all to look at is my vocabulary. Does it all flow together? Is it too low of a level or too high of a level, and does it stay the same throughout?
2. Weaknesses of my project?
Organization: The content in my project doesn't feel organized. I always struggle with staying on the same idea, so I need to fix getting off track, especially in my body paragraphs.
Fluidity: My speaking isn't the greatest, and my enunciation isn't the best. Maybe to fix this I can grab a glass of water before the next time I do a take (yes that's a joke).
3. Strengths of my project?
My project thus far as shown the strength of conventions (minus the music). I think my genre conventions were utilized pretty well in my podcast, and provide a positive effect on my project. This is my main strength, and as I have mentioned before this is definitely a work in progress.
Hey Jake! I've got a peer review for you based on activity 1:
ReplyDeleteSo the first thing is meeting the criteria for the project. I think the way you presented your genres flowed well and you described them really well, but I would try being more specific in the way you analyze them. By that I mean specifically state the audience, author, appeal, etc that makes that genre so important- it would also help to make everything more clear.
The second thing is detail and development. Like I said, I think if you add more details to the rhetorical analysis of each genre, it could really help to develop the podcast. Bottai also said we should try to have about three examples of the genre per genre, so if you include those you'll also have a more detailed and developed final cut.
Last thing is the use and citation of sources. You didn't really cite anything (neither did I) so this point doesn't apply. Just remember to add some credits or cite them in a separate document for the last cut.
You asked about the transitions, and I didn't think they were weird at all. If you're still unsure, adding some sort of sound effect or something might help to make the transitions more clear. But I think the level of vocabulary you used was perfect because it sounds really conversational. The way you spoke was clear and your podcast sounds natural which is really good!
Hi Jake! I listened to your podcast and really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteI love your intro - it’s engaging, interesting, and fits the conventions of the podcast well.
I was a little bit confused about emails as a genre. Are they forms of writing in the field of marketing and business or are they just forms of communication? If they are forms of communication, how does that affect business as a whole?
You explained that emails are used in “many ways, shapes, and forms” - what are those ways? How are they affected by the rhetorical concepts? How do they distinguish them from class presentations?
I really enjoyed your description of the author of class presentations. It was a great inclusion of a rhetorical concept. It helped me understand the importance to the field of business.
Hi Jake,
ReplyDeleteWhile I think what you have so far is fine, clearly there's a whole lot left to do. The specifics are kinda lacking for a majority of the podcast, and those in there can really improve your project.
Also, I think you really need some music to help the tone of the podcast, because having a deep voice, which I definitely know about, makes it very easy for someone to just tune you out, while some music can help keep people's attention.
Overall though your delivery is great and the initial information is solid, so you have a good base to work with. Good luck with your final draft!
Hello Jake,
ReplyDeleteI listened to your podcast and have a great amount of feedback for you. It appears that you have many plans for the future of your podcast. I think you should stay with those plans in order to produce a good podcast. Also I believe adding an intro and outro with music would be a good idea to be more inviting to the audiences ears. Also I would add other people talking or sound affects to accompany your voice and create a more well rounded podcast.
Best Wishes!
Nick Hernandez