Sunday, April 3, 2016

Content Outline

The Big Picture


In this post I'm going to be giving a rough outline of my project, highlighting all of the major points and providing evidence for each part.

The Outline


Opening Section:

Here I plan on introducing the argument and the idea that school lunches are healthier than homemade lunches. To grab the reader's attention in the introduction I need to find a shocking statistic that catches the eye of the reader. Hopefully this will get the reader to keep reading. Another way to grab the reader's attention is to introduce a study from an easily recognizable institution or school (like Virginia Tech), to establish a bit of credibility in this essay.

Body Paragraph 1:

The main idea here is to establish facts about obesity rates in America, and to stay semi-general in this section. This is where I plan on putting in the facts, for later elaboration in other paragraphs.

Evidence - Obesity rates have been climbing tremendously over the past 50 years (1/3 children are obese).
  • This proves that school lunches could possibly be one of the factors of why children are at unhealthy weights in current times.
  • This is important because these high weights and unhealthy body fat can lead to diseases in adulthood for the children.
Evidence - School lunches average less calories than brought from home lunches.
  • This proves that school lunches are calorically healthier than at home lunches.
  • This is important because at the end of the day the amount of calories put in your system normally determine weight gain.

Body Paragraph 2: 

The main idea of this body paragraph is to go off of the facts in BP1 to go in depth and talk about how this is affecting the kids across the United States.

Evidence - The social development of overweight children has a negative impact on their lives (social anxiety and self-consciousness increase heavily).
  • This evidence proves that there needs to be an emphasis on child development through health in the United States.
  • This is important because the future of America relies on what how we make changes now, rather than later
Evidence - The lunches from home lack the same nutritional value of school lunches.
  • This Evidence proves that the best option for kids is to eat the school provided lunches.
  • This is important because this directly correlates to what the bodies of students are getting as far as nutritionally, which goes into how much energy and what diseases they could potentially develop.

Body Paragraph 3:

The last body paragraph will explain that the school lunches are both economical and healthy, in general and not case to case.

Evidence - School lunches cost significantly cheaper than your average home prepped lunch.
  • This proves that not only are school lunches healthier, but they also save the parents time and money as well.
  • This is important because an extra 15 minutes in the morning can be precious and an extra 10-15 bucks at the end of the week can go a long ways for some families.
Evidence - School lunches provide all of the major food groups needed for a growing child.
  • This proves that schools are making an effort to give children the necessary food to live a healthy lifestyle. 
  • This is important because it shows that schools aren't cutting ways around food, in terms of healthy options for the kids.

Closing Section:

Here I plan to recap all of the point I've made and restate how important it is to do what is best for the kids. At the end of the day, the child is affected here, not the parent. To explain to the audience the larger meaning, I can emphasize the facts once again. I can reference studies here, and give cold, hard data to prove anyone wrong who doesn't believe in it. Secondly, I plan on leaving off in a sentimental note. I'll use a personal experience to describe the tough upbringing of being obese, and how packed lunches contributed to this upbringing.

2 comments:

  1. Hey Jake! I think your content outline looks great so far. It looks like you have a good handle on this project. Here is the link to my peer review for you for more comments! http://kellyreager.blogspot.com/2016/04/peer-review-for-jake-gyles.html#comment-form

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  2. Hi Jake! I really liked your outline and I thought it was extremely detailed, well organized and it flowed really well. I also think that you are making a lot of good points and I know I've heard you talk about this in class and how it affected you personally so I think this is a great topic!

    I think that you laid out your arguments really well and you have a good amount of detail and evidence for where you are going to back up your topics! For your last paragraph, I think that you could maybe find the school lunch thing that Michelle Obama introduced and tried to make school lunches healthier but it wasn't exactly the case. I know in my school they changed all of our vending machines, took away candy, but left other foods that looked healthy but they actually weren't, and then in the cafeteria, we had pizza everyday because they said it was technically a vegetable. Dumbest thing ever. But it happened.

    I think your outline really satisfies the elements of the rhetorical situation. You stated what you want to accomplish and you talked about who would care and why it matters!

    Although you didn't provide any links for me to see if you have credible sources, I think that you probably have them somewhere and you will do great. If you have credible sources to back up your "evidence" statements, I think that this is going to be a credible project and it was really well thought out!

    Great job!

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