What up doe
In this blog you're about to tune in to the dopest paper of 2016. So dope.
Link
Here it is right here.
Key Info
Look everyone my essay is straight fire, but I think you need to look at my organization. That is the only thing that I am truly worried about. If it is that bad then rip me a new one, but try to positively rip me a new one.
Major Weaknesses
Other than my drive for school, I think this essay is most week in the structure. I tried to make it not too choppy, and create fluidity. Did it work, well you'll have to tell me. I don't know how this one is going to come off to the readers, since no one has really given me a review. Like I said don't be afraid to hurt my feelings, I'll only cry a little bit.
Major Strengths
This essay has some prime time content if you ask me. My personal anecdotes are so on point that it'd be a shame if you call me out on them. The heart and soul went into this paper and I hope you cry and become more understanding through this paper. I'm going to change lives one view at a time so let's do this <3.
Hi Jake!
ReplyDeleteI peer reviewed your work and you can find it HERE
Good Luck!
Hi Jake,
ReplyDeleteYou do have a fire paper. I think your essay is very fluid and perfect until the end were you briefly mention people with lower incomes. I do not think you really addressed this counterargument well and would like for you to go more in depth with this counterargument. You just mentioned it and did not really provide a strong reason why it is not valid.
Great job